It's been awhile since I read this adventure. I re-read it to familiarize myself with it. to potentially present at a local convention. I made some observations that I thought I would share with you all:
-- I appreciate that the content warning was there. The background vibe of this adventure is mature and somber. The story of the archfey is a hopeful, honorable and tragic one. The adventure follows suit: somber and then it gradually rises to a place of hope and reconcilliation.
-- The DC 17 Charisma (Insight) check seems a bit high coming right out the gate. I like that there is a check opportunity for PCs to discover that this 'graying' effect is spreading. This causes a bit of confusion as to the "why" though? As I understand this, the color is taken when the children pass and their memories are a taken from the archfey minions to the domain. This could go in different directions that the adventure flow doesn't prescribe. If the 'graying' is spreading, then are more children passing on?
-- The background of the adventure mentions concerns of the Emerald Enclave, but other than that, makes no mention of them beyond the adventure. This could be a great adventure hook for PCs that are members of the Emerald Enclave.
-- One of the adventure hooks is the Call to Action; not sure if this was intended or not, but presenting it to players as a hook and then presenting the Call to Action might have the player wondering "Why did I need an adventure hook then?"
-- There are some vibrant NPCs in the adventure. This gives DMs the opportunity to present a different cast of fey creatures to their players!
-- I believe what is in the Wrap Up of the adventure is moving. The interaction with Susana at the end should capture the tone of the adventure you present. The designer does provide a good supported description of Susana to capture ending dialogues in any way you wish.
My rating is based off of this being a first product I have read from this designer and common "first effort" editting and styling observations. I do hope to see more adventures from this designer throughout the Dungeoncraft Program!
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