Similar to comments from other reviewers, I liked the concept and basic story line of the adventure, but it seemed a bit "rushed" to completion. Another round of edits or review would likely clear up most things. Sentence structure and word choices are sometimes awkward (a couple of places seemed to have had a spell-checking program insert an incorrect word -- "dryer," for example, in part 3); missing commas caused me to have to pause or re-read sections; adjustments in part 2A were reversed; charts (part 2C) and options (part 3) were missing. A character "Dori" is mentioned (as possibly a primary character), but does not come up later.

I guess from a price point/persepctive, I expected more. I like the story, though, and the introduction to the Canvas Domain of Delight.

I enjoy the story and the concept for the adventure, but it could use another round of edits due to typos.

Major issues: -There is no title for Part 1: Draw the Line in the main text. It should be at the top of p. 6 -On p. 7 Adjusting the scene: The labels are backwards and should read (Very strong, strong, weak)

From a design standpoint, the sandworm and blizzard encounters are rather similar.

Finally, there are no maps or printer friendly version included. At this price point I was expecting more.

Concept-wise, I like the theme of this module.

My comment, and why I'm giving it a three, is because it mentions details that aren't actually given in the mod. Take for example the chart in the Summer Wastes, or the threats that are supposedly faced in the Autumn Area.

Even at the end, where you say the enemy could be tricked, there aren't any example for how it can be done.

Respectfully, if you're going to give this information, then I'd like for it to actually be there for me to see.

Prepping this adventure for my Fey-Run weekend one-shots next month. I thought I would share my thoughts:

• Lots of interesting and entralling narratives. I especially like the descriptives of the Domains Archefey: Estorian LeFae. The designer give you plenty of descrptive to portray the eladrin in vibrant detail!
• The Domain itself is much like the other sportlight adventures-intruigingly unique--I picture an artist paint palette when I read through it.
• The CTA provides you will many options to portray the Domains landscape through a table that helps with some of the depictions.
• The macguffin is just as unique as the regions within the domain that they must go to find them!

The highlight for me as a designer is a language-based challenge, Not a puzzle. Not a trap. But a language-based skill check. You have to check it out. Inventively original! If I have to nitpick, I would say there is reference to a cursed branch that has to be acquired, but for the life of me I can't find in the adventure where the players can do that. But honestly?- I don't care--this adventure hits the sweet spot for me in presentation, narrative and meta. Kudos all the way around for all involved in its development!

Oh yeah--add it to your Fey trove...gift it to your fey-renz!