For inventiveness and the inclusion of mini ecologies for each slime (plus the general dsecription at the end of the book) I wanted to give this product 5 stars. I wouldn't have thought that slimes could be that interesting but the author has made them so.
However, I had to reduce the score due to the following spotted on a single reading.
Capitals: There should be consistency in the use of initial capitals for names e.g. on page 2 we have 'Burning Slime' and 'burning slime'. There should also be consistency in capitals for 'slime', 'jellies; and 'oozes' e.g. on page 23 we have 'Often Oozes and Slimes', on page 24 we have 'jellies, Oozes, and slimes' and on page 26 'jellies, oozes, and slimes'.
Capitals: I don't know what the official guildelines are regarding the initial capitals for Damange Immunities but we have, for example, on P.2 Fire but on page 12 acid; bludgeoning...
Capitals: In the phrase 'Blind Beyond This Radius' shouldn't only the first word have initial capitals?
P.4 Sticky Bombs - Wrong heading style.
P.12 (and following pages) 'Damage Resistances acid;' should not have a semicolon.
P.14 Copper slime's description mentions an electrical attack which is not in the game stats.
P.14 and P.17 Both the copper and iron slimes have spikes, so shouldn't their attacks be Piercing and not Bludgeoning?
P.17 Lifecycle. The second sentence starts with 'They' which presumably should refers to the slime's young; but the first sentence never uses that (or similar) term.
P.17 'Relationship with humans' should be a heading.
P.18 Near end of stat box, LEatherporter should be Leatherporter.
P.18 The last two sentences need clarification as the first of these say the host can eventually remove the slime but the second says it can't since they are dead!
P.19 Last paragraph on left, first sentence; 'Iron Corpse' should be 'Ironcorpse'.
P.19 The last paragraph of the game stats refers to a Leather Slime and not a Plated Slime.
P.20 The last line of Leogan, 'counterspell' should be 'Counterspell'.
P.22 Under 'Behaviour' it is unclear why the slime could be trapped when the portal closes. If they are "in the past" what prevents them just opening a new portal? If, instead, they are between times (i.e. the portal is a corridor rather than a door) then does this mean that the creation of ANY time portal releases them?
P.22 The pargraph under 'Relationship with humans' indicates that the slime can beneficially slow time, but the 'adventuring gear' description only has negative effects so clarification needed.
P.22 Start of first paragraph on the right, 'Slime-piece' should be 'Slime-pieces' (add 's').
P.22 Start of second paragraph on the right, 'Slime pieces' should be 'Slime-pieces' (add '-').
P.23 End of the 'adventuring gear' description, 'Slime Time Dial' should be 'Slime Dial' (time does not form part of the name).
P.25 'Katharzoa of the class Amorphozoa' should be 'Class' (only case of initial lower case).
P.25 Under 'Slimes - Laspizoa', 'Species of this genus' should be 'Genus' (only case of initial lower case).
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