I initially downloaded this just to take a look at the additional races/classes, to see if they would fix my homebrew setting that I've only just recently started working on.
I had my adventure set in an archipelago, and was going to start on a ship heading there, from a continent which I hadn't decided on. I also hadn't thought much about anything of the rest of the world.
After reading only 13 pages of this document, I have reworked my ideas to fit into your world, as I love it. (I have now readaboutathirdThe story behind the four continents. The brief history section is absolutely fantastic. Extremely interesting backstory to the world, but not so extensive that it restricts me, and gives me too much to remember. I can fill in the gaps on my own, making it my own version of your world. I'm absolutely entranced so far. Not only the story, but the naming conventions. I particularly struggle with thinking up names for locations, and all the of your names are wonderful - the continents, countries, and cities are what I have seen so far, and they seem easy enough for me to pronounce, but wonderous enough to be from a fantasy realm.
I'm still going to have the campaign starting in my own set of islands, but now they're going to be in the middle of a trade route between Velea and Uawei, essentially used for pit stops. (Going to have a smuggling of slaves from Velea to Uawei plot going on, probably involving a vampire and your dhampir race. You've given me so much inspiration!) then I'll be excited to get my players exploring Velea, once I have a good understanding of it.
One piece of constructive feedback I do have is a slight naming mistake I noticed on page 94. At the top right, under "Cardinal Origin Features" for the Sorcerer, it says 1st level freatures are Dark Ideals, Bonus Cantrips; then 6h Level Corrupt Embodiment. The actual descriptions of Corrupt Embodient and Dark Ideals have the levels reverse though. Now a huge issue, but would be nice if it were fixed for my slightly pedantic side.
Keep up the writing and your amazing storytelling.
Edit: Slight update as I have read more and managed to make a payment for it. You definitely deserve more than I could pay.
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