I have chosen to offer publishers these comments in the hope that they may be of some help to improve this game.
This looks like it could be a good game. There seems to be a good background. I have no problem with the dice mechanics and the ideas are essentially all there.
It is a free product. A product such as this is essentially there so that us cuscustomers can appraise the product and decide if we want to spend money on the full product. It therefore is your advertising 'flyer' announcing how good your game is. This is just a sample. If you want more, come and buy our product. Something like this is often called a quick start or jump start set of rules.
Did it impress me? Definitely not!
Do I want to buy into this game? No!
Why not?
The layout is really bad. I was just getting into reading the rules when I hit a big blank box with 'features available in full product.' Then another. Then another. Then whole blocks of them. By about page 30 Ihad given up. This was just as bad as a piece of writing that had poor grammar or was full of spelling mistakes. It completely breaks the reader's train of concentration so that the message that the writer is trying to convey is completely lost.
It looks really bad. It looks unprofessional. It looks like the authors and/or publishers have no idea.
I strongly recommend that the authors do the following:
Completely re-edit the 'jump start rules' (hope ypou don't mind me calling them jump start rules).
Remove those annoying boxes.
State what the customers will get in thefull set of rules.
You may also want to advertise other products that you are selling.
Good luck. Happy gaming.
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